7月28日雅思大作文范文2 ：犯罪类话题怎么破?

7月28日雅思大作文
“Some people who have been in prison become good citizens. Some people therefore think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?”

高分范文
01、Many criminals can be reformed people after they serve their time in jail. [习语表达：serve the/somebody’s time] Since theirfaults have been rectified [原形rectify], I would, if I were a school principal, [故意设计一个虚拟语气，丰富语法现象] invite those ex-criminals to help my teachers foster students’ good behavior.
 
02、The primary consideration is that [引导表语从句] those former offenders’ real-life cases are lessons that are more convincing than what an effective teacher could be. Teachers may [在这里不表可能性，表让步] demonstrate numerous examples in their classes; however, those cases may not be as authentic and compelling as they should be until they are told by an ex-criminal in person. Teachers may [在这里不表可能性，表让步] be role models in behavior; students may however develop no clear awareness of abiding by[abide by the rules unless they actually see the consequences of breaking them.[两个长难句组成此段落的重要内容，注意比较teachers和ex-criminals的对比，是内容设计的关键] Both situations are where [引导名词词组] reformed ex-criminals should be invited into classrooms.
 
03、In addition, teachers do not compare with [这个词组用主动语态时意义为“比得上”] ex-criminals for their likely patronizing [原形：patronize orintimidating [原形：intimidate] attitude is undesirable. Those corrected and changed criminals are otherwise humble. When patronized or frightened [原形：frighten], students, young and prone to be rebellious, may be provoked [原形：provoke] and act against rules knowingly. This is a risk that no school would like to take. Instead, a modest attitude is more welcome. Former criminals, unlike teachers, who may act like saints, are regretful about the harm and damage they have caused and thus oftenadopt a gentle and moderate attitude. [长难句]
 
[如果可以在body部分设计2-3个长难句，也就2-3个足够了，语言表述部分会有提分]
 
04、In conclusion, it is an adoptable proposition that [引导主语从句] former offenders who have turned over a new leaf [习语表达：turn over a new leaf] can be good teachers for students learning to behave. Since they have changed, they are safe. Most importantly, they have the potential to outperform professional teachers.