经过暑假学生的人从众模式后,我发现大家写作中的问题,如喷井式出现!其中最普遍也令我印象最深刻的就是大家对于连接词的忽视。
接下来我以一位学生的句子作为例子,我们来开始了解一下吧!
(谢谢这位小可爱的供稿~)
1、示例:
(这篇文章是关于telecommuting,很多同学应该有印象。)
Great workers can work at home, attend the meeting through some applications and submit some documents online, without the development of technology, employers can hardly get help from people living in other place.
如果大家按照中文理解,文章思路其实是没有问题。
但是!
如果我们有学习过或者接触了解过翻译,或许听说过这样的表达“意合”、“形合”。
由于语言与思维模式之间相互制约,西方形式逻辑的思维模式要求语言倚赖于各种连接手段承上启下。而汉语注重内省和体悟,不重逻辑,因而语言简约、意义模糊。
由于我们对此差异的不了解或者忽视,出现了我们现在比较普遍的写作错误。
现在大家再读一下稍作修改之后的句子,是否会觉得更清晰紧凑?
修改后:
Great workers can work at home, attend the meeting through some applications and submit some documents online. However, without the development of technology, employers can hardly get help from people living in other place.
其实正是由于大家已经习惯了中式的表达方式,才出现了错误,甚至会觉得这样表达不可思议。
2、在雅思写作评分标准中,第二点也有明确指出coherence and cohesion(连贯与衔接),也就是考察文章的结构是否合适,逻辑是否严谨,句与句和段与段之间的衔接是否合理。
相信许多学生接触雅思写作之后,都会意识到雅思写作中衔接的重要性。如何提高连接词使用的准确度就是大家接下去学习的重点。建议大家在学习过程中可以多查阅词典,多参考考官范文,最安全的方法就是尽可能多用native speaker使用的连接词。
例如:
Therefore, it is important that children learn at an early age to use the equipment enthusiastically and with confidence as they will need these skills throughout their studies and working life. (C6 P172 因果关系)
We also forget that it is a source of pollution and difficult to dispose of. (C5 P173 递进关系)
However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. (C5 P165 转折关系)
3、常用的连接词有:
表示因果关系:because/ as/ due to the fact that …/ for the reason that …(注意这些词之后需要接句子); because of/ due to(接短语); therefore/ as a result/ as a consequence/ consequently/ accordingly等
表示转折关系:but/ however/ on the other hand/ while/ yet/ in spite of 等
表示递进关系:furthermore/ in addition/ additionally/ moreover等
4、当然在雅思写作中连接词只是衔接的其中一种手段而已,代词甚至是从句都可以起到使句子之间更加紧凑的作用。
例如:
people who live by themselves are more likely to feel lonely and isolated because they live without the daily support that a family can provide.
最后:
今天除了强调连接词的使用,请大家再回顾开篇的段落,不知道有没有发现句子之间有过多逗号。
请各位亲爱的同学注意,雅思作文的句子不是拉面,并不是越长越好,不要无节制地连续使用逗号,刻意拉长句子,句号该出手时就出手。
希望大家能够攻克雅思写作~早日屠鸭~