雅思大作文题目
Some people think that the best way to reduce time spend travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree.
Discuss both of the views and give your opinion.
写作范文及解析
In our cities, if the parks and similar facilities are removed, and instead more residential buildings are erected, is it the necessary result that commuters travel faster? I hardly think so. [短句放心用]
To begin with, does high efficiency of commuting solely or really depend on whether workers have easy access to the workplace? Admittedly, [此处的让步就是对反方观点的简单讨论] taking a detour consumes time as the route has to avoid the parks and cannot go straight lines. Nevertheless, the ten or fifteen minutes on the road is not necessarily a drag that slows the commuters down. Instead, what actually stalls the urban travelers is the influx of passengers at every metro station or the huge and sluggish flow of motor vehicles. They are the real culprit. [短句刻意用] For example, it may take more than five minutes for a traveler to arrive at the platform, plus the time he or she waits before embarking on the train. [可以举例,但是要精炼,不是“娓娓道来”讲故事。]
There is another reason. [短句放心用] If urban professionals will move to live in the proposed housing, cities may now have the solution. [此处的通过假设来让步也是对反方观点的简单讨论] However, here comes a problem that precedes it. Urban accommodation is highly likely to be expensive, deterring the workers as the target buyers. It is also likely that many of the people prefer their suburban neighborhoods to the inner city. For example, many people would not like to live and work in the same zone of their city and like to escape from the CBD after work or on weekends. Either case would render the proposed practice ineffectual. In other words, if those apartments do not sell or sell well [注意这里sell的“不及物动词”用法], there will not be the desired large population that will benefit from the short distance of travel.
If we could all agree on the reasons, we would come to the realization that shortening the distance between home and work may not cut the time spent on traveling. With other measures, commuters are able to move faster.